Hey, I read this VN together with part of my team and we took turns reading the stories out loud, which was fun. First off, I really liked the concept of switching between the "normal" scenes and the "darker" ones.
The music fits the mood, although our audio guy will download the game for himself to listen to it in full quality instead of a discord stream. If he has any feedback for improvements, he'll probably let you know :)
Due to the duality of the stories, it was sometimes difficult to get through the peaceful scenes, since I wanted to get to the gory ones faster, haha. I don't really have any good suggestion on how to handle that differently, though.
My editor just suggested adding some humor or "moe" to the idyllic parts to spice them up. Not sure if that's everyone's cup of tea, though. Just his personal opinion/suggestion :D
The background art has a unique style and it fits the stories that are being told. Same with the menu. I love how it mirrors the duality of the short stories.
Edit: I forgot the comparison feature! I really liked that as well, especially from a writing/word choice standpoint.
Overall, well done. The novel looks very polished.
Spoilers below:
Our artist predicted that there'd be body where the pothole was, which was close enough I guess, haha :D
Also, dolphins are evil. We all know it.