Realm of Divinos looks beautiful! Love the visuals!
General Pitch Suggestions:
-- Open your pitch with game specific content over generic blurbs. We don't know anything about the story, characters, history, etc so it's difficult to get emotionally attached or engaged.
-- Reference your adorable mushroom characters, hunky love interests, etc to get people's attention and interest. See Kena Bridge of Spirits for an excellent example.
Press Kit Suggestions:
-- Make links clickable (insert link)
-- Focus on the game visuals by expanding each screenshot image to a full slide
-- Wrap all of your content into a Press Kit pack (eg on Google Drive) and include a single downloadable zip file with everything