Oh I have an idea, what if instead of talking about how the NPC's feel about the hero's journey, talk about how the characters feel. They feel challenged but they will prove the people wrong and become great. Something along that lines maybe?
Video is really good! The pitch text doesn't really sell it to me? I guess it's supposed to be clever, but, it doesn't click with me and just comes off as bashing the game. Cool game though!
The pitch tweet isn't very well made. Could use a video and a description. Maybe use the previous winning Pitchyagame tweets as a template example for what to do?
Cute game and cute art! Maybe in the trailer show some more of the gameplay happening instead of only text boxes. I'm sure the game has lots of people talking, but it would be interesting to see things happening in the trailer as opposed to just reading the trailer.
The main pitch for Pitchyagame is the tweet, and it doesn't explain anything about the game, it just links to somewhere else that it gets explained, but, the art is very good!
RIVAL!!! Your's is my favorite pitch so far, it's so FLAWLESS!!! Shows lots of gameplay, has high personality and energy, looks fun, is clear, has good art and interesting characters, the pitch tweet is fantastic! YOU DID GOOD!
Ohh it's so coooool. I'm so excited to talk about this game I adore the idea it's awesome!!! I love the music in the trailer and the antagonist he's just so mysterious and cool, and the story, and just UNFH!! Really cool, can't wait to play it!
Cute idea! It sort of looks like it has an art app grid or a game dev grid instead of a video game room design type UI going on. The black text doesn't work that great either. Nice art though!
Cool! Though the art seems very cluttered and not unified. The pitch doesn't explain the game much, but imo it's about pirates and it's a board game so probably don't need that much information anyways. Still, it could use more selling points in the pitch tweet than just the name itself. Like for example if you have a cake, you have me sold, but if it's a triple decker chocolate cake, you have me triple-sold!
I LOVE your art!! My critique is, one of the main selling points is that it has cards and monsters to fight, but I don't see the cards, the monsters, or any fighting in the trailer. So it just looks like you explore dungeons. I guess you're still in progress though, and at least there are cards and monsters in your art. The song you picked for the trailer too doesn't seem to have high energy either, but of course it's a dungeon song so that makes sense. My critique is just things that you probably would'nt have been able to implement anyway since your game is mostly unfinished, so, good work overall for what you got!
I really love your art!! The trailer has high energy and is so cool. The tweet could use the trailer in it to stand out, as #PitchYaGame mainly judges the tweet and not so much the itch or steam page.
