Looks interesting! The tweet is well written, I just would replace/remove the final bit about Loathe with something else, as a reader I have no context of who that is.
The press kit looks good too! It's well laid out. I think the 15s trailer you've used in your tweet moves too fast, and it's hard to gauge what you do in the game. The longer one in your press kit flows better :)
Thank you very much for the feedback! :) Yup, someone else also suggested changing the LOATHE bit, will do that in my PitchYaGame tweet. As for the teaser, I did this short one especially for the Pitch tweet to give a visual idea of the game. I think as Pitch tweets need to be concise and straight to the point, maybe it's better to have a short video showing what the game looks like at a glance, rather than a lengthy trailer? Dunno for sure though... Then the full trailer is on the Itch and Steam pages as well as the press kit, in case people want to know more about the game.
