Your press kit is pretty good! The text is engaging and I get a good feel for what you are building. I don't like the style of the tweet unfortunately - it's very negative and doesn't make me want to engage, which is a shame because the content of the press kit is really engaging and interesting.
Try giving your press kit more personality throughout by adding more art through all the slides - see this chucklefish one as an example: https://docs.google.com/presentation/d/18VijoCAzJiQwA4UUks9qVA_TPXRjL78aoywE9rdL...
Don't link to youtube videos in tweets by the way, upload the video instead. YT vids don't autoplay on Twitter so you don't get that scroll through engagement.
Your key art is awesome by the way :)