Really great! I like how you wove the background into the story, rather than front-loading it in the introduction.
There were some editing issues (one sentence in particular I still can't parse: "But he needed to understand her clearly, so with each completed work was quickly forgotten...") but most of that (I'm sure!) comes down to the time constraint of the challenge.
Also, great twist at the end! I didn't see it coming, but in retrospect it was inevitable! The best kind. :)
Thank you for reading. On the note of editing issues, I think it's the curse of taking about too many ideas and revising them over and over. I reviewed the original version vs. the final this morning using Google Doc's revision history, and the whole document was lit up with changes. As a result, I think I just lost sight of how messy that particular sentence and paragraph became.
Rather than let it remain as it was, I went ahead and updated it. I uploaded a post-Jam revision to clarify that specific paragraph. Given the time put into this story, I'd hate to not improve that section to benefit the overall story. I'll leave both versions posted with an explanation so individuals can read the "Jam" version or the "revised" version.
Thanks again for taking the time to read!
