Thank you for reading. On the note of editing issues, I think it's the curse of taking about too many ideas and revising them over and over. I reviewed the original version vs. the final this morning using Google Doc's revision history, and the whole document was lit up with changes. As a result, I think I just lost sight of how messy that particular sentence and paragraph became.
Rather than let it remain as it was, I went ahead and updated it. I uploaded a post-Jam revision to clarify that specific paragraph. Given the time put into this story, I'd hate to not improve that section to benefit the overall story. I'll leave both versions posted with an explanation so individuals can read the "Jam" version or the "revised" version.
Thanks again for taking the time to read!