You do a good job depicting the action, and using the present tense helps develop a real sense of immediacy. You also used the present tense very consistently--good job! That's easy to mess up.
The second "paragraph" (the dialogue between Laurel and Evander) was difficult to follow; adding lines between the speakers, and perhaps a few more speech tags, would have helped. I had to go back a few times and reread before I understood who was speaking each line.
But you did a great job keeping the tension up, and having the forest actually help her out was a nice touch!