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Good use of the theme! I like the unexpected use of the mirror as a trap, and the doppleganger's appearance.

I'd recommend breaking up the large paragraphs into smaller ones, to make them easier to read. It also gives you better control over the pacing of the story.

Aside from that, the story scanned well and the ending was ominous!


Yeah, I think next time I'm going to try to put the text into the template at an earlier point in the process, to better get a feel on how it'll look and read in the end.