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Dead-ends and New Beginnings's itch.io pageResults
| Criteria | Rank | Score* | Raw Score |
| Adherence to the Theme | #5 | 4.143 | 4.143 |
| Overall | #7 | 3.905 | 3.905 |
| Flow & Clarity | #10 | 3.786 | 3.786 |
| Concept & Originality | #18 | 3.786 | 3.786 |
Ranked from 28 ratings. Score is adjusted from raw score by the median number of ratings per game in the jam.
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A really well do, and suitably eerie, use of the reflection theme. I like it al lot.
Also we need to know more about the Knightly Brother's retirement plan!
noooo! he was going to retire!
good story mate!
Loved the concept of cognito-trapss. Well done!
This was a very effective use of the reflection theme with a good twist, well written and clear.
Good use of the theme! I like the unexpected use of the mirror as a trap, and the doppleganger's appearance.
I'd recommend breaking up the large paragraphs into smaller ones, to make them easier to read. It also gives you better control over the pacing of the story.
Aside from that, the story scanned well and the ending was ominous!
Yeah, I think next time I'm going to try to put the text into the template at an earlier point in the process, to better get a feel on how it'll look and read in the end.
Very nice. I liked the ending, and you got in a good amount of characterisation given how little space there was. To be hyper-pedantic, there were a few minor grammatical errors, but nothing that affected comprehension or the flow of the story.
Thanks. Yeah, there's probably a bunch of mistakes I didn't really have any time to do revisions. I might go back to it after the voting is over.