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you have a very strong initial concept that could be made more understandable through some writing and ux adjustments.

i enjoyed the art and overall theme, and like the concept of a before/after story, finding things in the aftermath. also the 'look around' effect while mousing around is very pleasant. most of the sound and ambience were well-fitting, and from a theming perspective everything was nice and consistent.

the weakest areas are in ux and the 'meat' of the story. the key theme of any adventure game is 'curiosity' and exploring or clicking something, especially when you specifically ask for it to be clicked should always yield something: wit, exposition, characterization. true you did a lot of basic scene setting, but it was mostly very dry. best example of violating this is clicking on the one tent 'you shouldn't'. then don't ask me to, or be more creative in how you admonish a player. 'someone pushes you out, how dare you!' same effect, but now you're giving story and consequence.

you were going for a suspense story, and that makes characterization even more important. the changes of the 'before and after' should have weight and consequence and give understanding into how characters would react to a monster suddenly appearing. how are they now behaving differently in response to something like this?

on the ux side, i'll echo the other comments about the dialog sound. however, the interaction and progression needed more baking. most interactions didn't need two actions, especially since it was very linear and there really wasn't much dependency on which order you interacted with anything. having to left click and right click was confusing, especially when there often wasn't even more dialog. there was no key difference between 'talking to people' and 'looking around' so just make it one shared interaction. i can sort of feel you making do with the system you were using, but even within that figuring out how to streamline that is a core element of game design.

also, for the 'keep the fire alive game', i'd say the requirements were too tight. basically burning all but one plank with a sliver to spare. think of ways to make it more engaging and give a little more margin for success. 

a very good effort, and a nice start to a promising concept.

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Hi Chris! Thanks for so many insightful comments. Writing is my weakest area at the moment so i'll be continuing to work on it. The story didn't really get across what I wanted but it taught me alot. This was my first time writing for a game really and it shows. Thank you for all the amazing coments about the game. 

For this game, it was difficult as it was just a team of 2, myself with a background in just programming and an artist. However that isn't an excuse for bad writing or difficult to navigate UI. Again, Thank you for all the feedback and I'll be looking to make improvements!