I love story games! Well done. This one was interesting and very unique. I did notice a few verb tense consistency issues. If you revise it, you could fix those. Overall, nice storytelling. :)
I thought I fixed all the verb tenses. ^^; Usually I'm consistent with that, but this past week I was struggling with that with pretty much everything I wrote (not just this game). When I have some downtime, I'll touch that up. Sorry about that.
