This short story underscores the charm in OPR's worldbuilding remaining a blank slate for those writing in these competitions. You can take the universe and give it a coat of comedy and slapstick, and it works. The allusions to one Mario Mario and the Inklings was amusing.
There were a few grammatical errors and changes in tense in the middle of a sentence that slowed down my reading pace here and there, but nothing too serious. The story felt very "chopped up" due to it's dialogue heavy nature, but I don't consider that to be a fault, but rather a necessary evil of creating a dialogue heavy entry.
Thank you for sharing this story for the jam!