It didn't come across as angry at all! In the same vein let me clarify that I offer feedback one writer to another, because that's helped me grow as an artist and I hope I can do the same for others. Thank you for taking the time to clarify the thinking behind some of your artistic choices. Allow me to clarify in turn some of my comments :)
'Mumble inaudibly' is a contradiction in terms. 'Mumbling' is something we can hear; 'inaudibly' is something we cannot hear. I'm guessing from your comment that you meant this to carry the meaning of 'mumbled unintelligibly' or 'mumbled something Doruk couldn't make out'. 'Inaudible' simply doesn't mean that.
The way I read the text, it was quite clear that Doruk was a child. I referred to him as a 'novice hunter' (and maybe I should have said "brand-new hunter") because as far as I could tell, Doruk is also at the point of "graduating" from childhood, as far as his culture is concerned. He's on his "prove I'm worth something as a hunter" field trip, isn't he? I certainly wasn't picturing him even as an adolescent, let alone a full-grown adult.
And the descriptions, specifically the "hands spilled their cargo of flame" one that I called out, didn't create the impression in me of a child struggling to understand. It's very elaborate and even poetic. From your comments you were trying to avoid plain descriptive language, so as to convey the impression that Doruk doesn't fully understand what he's seeing. To me, the poetic language used pulls in the opposite direction. That's also why I suggested you might want to sink the reader more fully in Doruk's perspective. It's easier to convey unfamiliarity, confusion, and a struggle to understand, if the reader never gets any other perspective, and therefore has to struggle a little themself to parse Doruk's immature grasp of things.