I really liked your much more down-to-earth take on the Battle Brothers here - and 'Averses the Younger' made me laugh out loud! Vyka especially had the potential to veer into being a caricature, but you kept him a good, believable character. ("Good" in the writing sense, let's be clear. I don't *like* him. He's a monster. But a well-written monster.)
The way the Brothers operate within the God-king's empire was textbook "legacy" but the very human way you depicted them kept it feeling original - well done there. The tone stayed nicely "grimly lighthearted" throughout, and the prose was snappy and engaging. Overall a very enjoyable piece.