I really liked your much more down-to-earth take on the Battle Brothers here - and 'Averses the Younger' made me laugh out loud! Vyka especially had the potential to veer into being a caricature, but you kept him a good, believable character. ("Good" in the writing sense, let's be clear. I don't *like* him. He's a monster. But a well-written monster.)

The way the Brothers operate within the God-king's empire was textbook "legacy" but the very human way you depicted them kept it feeling original - well done there. The tone stayed nicely "grimly lighthearted" throughout, and the prose was snappy and engaging. Overall a very enjoyable piece.

I thought it was an overall good entry, a bit blunt for my personal taste but that's also kind of how the battle brothers are. I particularly liked how cogent points were made for both sides of the moral argument though, instead of setting up an obviously correct view.

really liked the character descriptions and “Averses the Younger” joke

Loved the details and "starship troopers" esque concept, but felt very put off by the language; just couldn't get myself to believe that these characters were people who did what they did and talked the way they did.

“Averses the Younger” hah! Nicely done, would be a great start to a campaign book.