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Made it to the end of the demo. When it showed which girl you were most likely to go to the dance with, I ended up with no one lol. I guess I didn't focus on 1 girl enough, though it seems a bit too soon to be focusing on one when the characters have barely been introduced?

I felt the Christianity parts of the story were a bit disconnected with the monster girl parts. It was like switching between a Sunday School lesson and an anime dating sim lol. Perhaps the girls could mention Christianity more in casual conversation; just something small like saying "I'll pray for you" or something. The Christianity parts also seemed a bit too detailed, for example it might be better to just have Father John say a couple of sentences instead of a whole multiple paragraph sermon. Also perhaps you can tie in Christianity to the characters' personal stories - like one of the girls could be dealing with a family that doesn't accept her faith (though you might've already been planning something like this for later).

The MC did seem like a bit of a Mary Sue to me, since he's brave enough to fight bullies and disciplined enough to maintain a regular exercise schedule and do his morning devotions every day and popular with the ladies (although that last part is expected for the genre). 

Overall though I think the game has potential and the setting is interesting. Good luck!

EDIT: I just had an idea. Have a scene where MC is about to have sex with one of the monster girls but then go "Whoops! Can't show this in a Christian VN!" Lulz.

>too soon to be focusing
fair, I'll have to consider padding out interactions in the full version

>minimize religion
I feel that would defeat the purpose of the VN.  Saying little things like "I'll pray for you" is both ineffective and still annoying to people who don't want anything to do with religion.  This could all be balanced with more slice of life moments however.

>MC Mary Sue
Yeah, I'm trying to find a good balance for him.  It want him to at least be balanced and open to enough things that he can related to any of the girls, but if having a bare minimum work out in the morning and only doing morning prayers still feels to much to some people, I'm not sure what level will satisfy people beside just making him literally an empty slob who does nothing ever.  Popular with the ladies is a trope for sure, but a demo doesn't have a lot of time to build up relationship.  Aria's route at least has her emotionally distant until the MC actually shows interest in her stuff.  Clover couldn't care less about the MC unless he shows interest in games.  Eva seems to have a bit of a crush by default.  Sera is just friendly to everyone.  And Wren is just going based on an interesting story she heard.