This one was a bit of a mixed bag to me.
I love the set up and characters, but the pacing was a bit confusing, and it didn’t flow well in parts.
It also switched from past to present tense a few times, something we’ve all fallen for, but distracting nonetheless.
This seems like the introduction to a much bigger story; I was confused by the ending. Perhaps there’s more?
I’d happily read it if there is.