Gotta be honest, was a tiny bit suspicious about that download, so I booted up a VM and played it in there. Glad to see it turned out to be a real game!
I really dig the idea of a console-based text adventure, but I have to be honest, after finishing two fetch quests, I got a little bored and quit the game. Maybe the modern world where everything constantly craves one’s attention just isn’t made for games like these anymore.
And yet, I want to believe! I read that you’re probably not continuing this game, but just in case, I think the most important thing here would be to start the story in a more engaging way. Right now, there’s just not a lot of reason for me to care about any of these characters. That said, I’m not a writer, so I fear I can’t really help you with the specifics.
Anyway, I’m glad you took the time to put together this demo! I’ve seen on your profile that you also made some other console-based games, which I’ll be sure to check out :)