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Sweet tale. Also surprisingly short.

You will have to excuse me for my malding at something as silly as seeing you write haikus... without a seasonal reference. It comes off as like, poet's first poem and while I haven't even bothered trying to meaningfully get into the literary market for poetry (most of them seem to be honorarium fees or pay to play), I'd like to say I'm at least well versed enough in poetry to suggest where you could have gone instead (I do love form poems-- it's perhaps more "work" but you could have popped off with a villanelle and I would have been like ヽ(´▽`)/). 

Like this is just a very minor me malding comment that I'm just bringing up as like a haiku sans seasonal reference hater (as a firm believer that one should like, master form poem's conventions before experimenting with them-- limitations breed creativity).

It was nice to have a variation in the sprite of the protagonist, the dragon's use of Spanish felt true to real life, the backgrounds were done well-- it was a solid package. The vibes were certainly on point

But it was also so short for all of the setup you gave us. That's perhaps the main "story" issue. We're approaching build-up and then it gets pulled out from under us with little more than the "meet cute". That being said, an issue of leaving the readers wanting more is not the worst issue to have when someone finishes a work :p