I think it is a very solid first attempt and very promising story telling, so well done. The first thing that I will personally work on is the main character design, but just because I know it's "Brain" from the AC demo scene and it completely takes me off the setting.
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Thanks for the feedback, I think all the graphics etc need an overhaul and more learning from my side and your spot on with Brian, he's everywhere originally he was just a place holder so I can get things hooked up but then I ran out of time to design my own character originally I wanted a younger person. I'm going to fire up the iPad at the weekend and get sketching again :)