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I just threw up. So this is my favorite submission I've played it, simply for the fact that it's... extremely educational. There's so much to absorb about narrative design here. Very inventive entry and great usage of our own struggles to refine our projects. So much funny stuff going on: the changing of titles, the implied ineptitude of our storytelling abilities, the reviews. I loved the gradual unveiling of refined cards, and the initial cards were always hilarious to me. It somehow seemed like the first polished versions were almost worse than the original ones, adding to the hilarity and realism.

The UI feels incredibly polished and functional. The visuals for the cards were just enough to keep it visually engaging and from feeling simply like text on a screen. One small complaint is the reviews being in two separate columns initially had me reading it a little funky, like maybe they should have been in extended lines instead of broken up side by side.

I enjoyed the gradual explanation of the deeper mechanics, and again how well it connects with the idea of our submissions. Somehow I got a 99 on the 2nd to last day but only a 91 on the final performance after only refining existing things, which is also another great connection to the development process. Sometimes our refinement can only detract from the experience that already existed. Sometimes a rough beat adds to the charm and enjoyment. Sometimes more work  put into what is already present can only remove the human qualities that make story telling such an elusive art form. All in all, this is an incredible submission that I think has so much to offer  to anyone who participates in game jams. Phenomenal work!

Thank you so much for this incredible review! I'm glad the core themes and mechanics resonated so deeply. I wanted to make something that captured what the creation process really feels like- slowly changing and changing and changing things, eventually becoming so numb to the material that we're almost unable to tell whether it's getting better at all without outside feedback. ("Writing is rewriting," as they say!) 

The insights you posed into the metaphorical meaning of many of these mechanics are extremely astute. The fact that you cared so much about the experience that you'd want to deeply explore the meanings means more to me than you can imagine. Great suggestion about the reviews screen too, I think that breaking them into two horizontal lines would be a perfect solution! 

This review is amazing. Thank you!!