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Sure, here are a few of the lines that had me a little confused about their structure, meaning, and how I was supposed to interpret them:

-You enter the dark void of crumbling egg-shell.

-Your mic to brain malfunctioned for a while...

-A horse with a bouquet of shimmer blooms.

-When the sun comes nigh, they roll their shines there.

Specifically, the sentence structure seems a little off occasionally and it almost seemed like a few words added, changed, or rearranged might do the writing a lot of favors. I did really like the project altogether though, best of luck continuing development!

Oh, I see. Well, that's the kind of phrases we desired for, really. And yes, some of them may feel a bit off for their poetic purposes. Poetry, or poesy as some still say, sometimes mess the words and structure for the course of meaning, symbolism, and sound.  

Some of the phrases in our game are riddles in connection to gameplay and the story to be continued (as in egg-shaped portal). 

Some are more like specific slang (as in mic to brain malfunction) of the character, who conducts the hypnotic regression.

 In a bouquet "shimmer" is a noun, and therefore may be comprehended as - a bouquet of blooms of soft wavering light (which is connected to the extra meaning behind the chosen flowers, their origins and essence, and the fields our Horse wave in - as in "sways").

The last one, sun and moon having a euphemism for intercourse (or, say, a date) - is purely poetic.

Maybe, it's just the specific writing style chosen for this story. Nevertheless, we thank you for the feedback on such interesting topic of creative writing; we understand that with more gameplay some text needs to be more clear and specific, that we'll do.