Woah, this game is huge! I think you did a great job in creating the story and the characters (I also played the first chapter, for GWJ#58, and I looked briefly at the second chapter before coming here). The whole project is really interesting, and I would love to play it all, but... I fell stuck at the second level ^-^". From the description, I also saw that there are two more mechanics that I didn't discover D:
I'm definitely bad at this type of games, so don't take my words as law, but I felt it a bit too hard. Maybe I would have liked a less steep learning curve, with shorter levels and frequent checkpoints; this way, it would be more enjoyable even for the average jam player :)
Besides that, the storytelling is great and the mechanics are really solid. Congrats for the project, and thanks :)