If you play my game it should come as no surprise that I have a very soft spot for projects like this. I quite like what you are working on and I am going to play this one more later. However, you seriously need someone to look over and edit your text, there are so many glaring problems with it. The music is cool but some of the noises and mixing you have done actually create pain for the one listening.
This is some truly insane and confusing shit, but I am going to do my best to get through it later so I can give you some proper feedback on your mechanics. I think that this can become something special with a lot of work.