To be honest I'm not that much into narrative games and therefore I didn't have the patience to read through it. I'm not your target audience and that's fine^^
That being said I like the format itself, it's almost a little advent calendar where you could reveal the next 'box' every day leading up to the finale.
There's definitely potential to build on it! For example you could have branching paths (think "Choose your own Adventure" games) or have some boxes contain a minigame instead of text only.
Even though I couldn't get myself to read it all, I very much enjoyed the art and music - well done! :)