I enjoyed the writing style especially pre Carnelians arrival with the internal dialogue. And would of enjoyed some more decision making in this phase to bring me more into the character. You showed more than told in your writing style which was nice, and although I'm not your target audience both in games I play and age (I would assume) I would definitely finish my date and reach a conclusion.
I liked the art style especially the hands they were really well done and the jazzy background music.
Pleasure to play.