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Hello! Welcome to Feedback Quest 5! It's nice to meet you! My name's Hythrain. I'm part of the FQ team and a hobbystreamer. I'm writing this review live after having played your game.

Canadian! Canadian! Canadian! I'm so glad to not only see someone who I know is a Canadian, but has made their game about places in Canada! As someone from the Toronto area who has also been to Gare Centrale in Montreal (I've been to Otakuthon a couple times), this was just so cool to see! I will 100% be playing more of this!

My biggest criticisms are a lack of sprites seen throughout the prologue and... well, a lot of errors in the writing. I suspect English isn't your first language? I'd suggest having a few sprites in the prologue to liven things up, even if it's not a whole lot. As for the writing errors, I'd like to offer my own assistance in this endeavor. As Mayshing/Altabestudio (one of the hosts for the FQ main events) can verify, I have some experience with story writing. I'd love to help a fellow Canadian out!

I only played through the prologue at this time, since I'm trying to cover all games and can't spend too much time on each one yet. However, this is 100% on my list for a more thorough play-through.

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Yeah, I admit the prologue is a bit of a mess at the moment, since it was made very early into the development of the game (q1-ish 2022), and not reflective of my newer writing nor the plot of the story 😅 Unfortunately, I guess first impressions matter! Right now, I am working my head off rewriting and polishing the prologue thanks to yours and everybody else's feedback.

I'd take up your offer of assistance regarding the story, but I encourage you to play beyond the prologue of the game when you have time, so you have an idea of my vision for the game. 


Again, thanks so much for the candid feedback and remarks 👍