First of all, I really like the story in general, most of the ROs and the level of customization for the MC. I particularly liked the customization when it comes to magical abilities, which I hope will be brought up a lot in future updates, and the backstory between your MC and one of the ROs.
However there was one thing that bugged me quite a bit when I read/played it about a month ago, which I don't know if is changed or not. If y That was in the sex scene with Ly where I had a choice between three different sexual positions/sexual acts and despite this it ended with my MC switching to the opposite position midway through. This made it feel both like my the choice I made for my MC didn't really matter and that the choice was taken away from me as a player/reader and I personally really didn't like that twist at all. It's completely fair if you want the sex scenes to be a particular way, but when you offer a particular option, I expect the story to respect that option instead of deciding that the MCs decide on the opposite course of action, so to speak, halfway through. I'm not saying that the sex scene as it was written won't work for anyone(for what it's worth, I really enjoyed it before the twist), but it would be nice if there was at least an option for readers/players to decide if we actually want the MC to switch things around after all or if we want them to stay in that position., so that those of us who'd prefer that last option can stick with that.
If you'd already taken care of this in the last update, please feel free to ignore what I've written, but if you haven't I just hope you can do something about it sooner or later. As it was, it ruined a lot of my enjoymen of the Ly romance path. There are still two ROs who look really interesting, G and Le, so even if nothing's changed or will change with the Ly sex scene, I'll still be looking forward to the developments of those two romances. But I do hope that we as a players/readers will get the opportunity to at least not switch things up in that scene.
Anyway, I hope my criticism won't discourage you too much. Apart from that point I really enjoyed this IF, like I said, and feel that it has a lot of promise and an approach that I really like.