Thank you! Good call about the paragraph breaks; I realize I've been using those very sparingly. Concerning the ending though, I'm honestly not sure if I would've gone further into it even if I'd had the space. Like, the development that the story focuses on is complete at that point, and I don't know if following that up with an explicit description of a vampire getting his head bitten off would've added much to the narrative as a whole. Still, I appreciate the feedback :D