Really liked the setup, had a similar feel to the old codex stories that you would find in old 40k codexes (circa 4th ed) . I think either making the whole thing out as a report, maybe having the helmet footage appended or something. Alternatively I think tying the narrative in and making it a bit more personal/emotional would have been nice too. Really enjoyed it, nice to see some varied factions too!
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Thanks so much :) And yeah, I was kind of leaning towards the Codex style entry as a way to introduce my own little homebrew group of mercs. Having a more personal point of view seems to be a pretty common ask so I'll be doing that next writing jam :D Not sure what kind of story I'll tell but I'm liking that helmet cam idea so keep an eye out next round for me o7