Thanks for feedback. I'm very much a noob at writing so shit like this happens a lot. Thank you for pointing it out.
Actually, I don't find anything wrong with your writing. It looks more like you're skipping over things to get to the heart of the story you want to tell. I can understand that. Maybe what might help is imagine you're the one in a given situation and how you would react to it... and what it might take for you to come to terms with it. That can be as much of an adventure than the heart of the story you're trying to get to. Who knows what might happen. ;) (But for the love of all that is holy, no dancing teapots! lol)