Skip to main content

Indie game storeFree gamesFun gamesHorror games
Game developmentAssetsComics
SalesBundles
Jobs
TagsGame Engines
(+1)

I'll admit, my eyesight is not the best but under that caveat, I found this hard to read.

The page is a bit busy which I find not great when there was an entire second page open to spread things out a bit. In fact the PDF comes with a second page that is just empty. Under Character Tracker, spacing between letters is reduced which gives it a weird mushed look. There is also suddenly no spacing between the section header Gameplay and the text underneath it.

Here's some other stuff I noticed:

Header Game Play - Gameplay is one word

repeated word under Gameplay - the the matching colors

Really the entire paragraph needs a re-read/re-write to get rid of grammar mistakes and make it clear how you are supposed to play.

This also talks about random card pulls that are not explained - was this on the second page and it got lost at some point?


I get it, layout-ing sucks and mistakes happen to the best but there's a lot of room for improvement. It is currently unplayable so I can't really rate it on anything but the creativity shown so far, which is good, just wish I could play it.

Yeah I couldn't get the full layout done before the end of the jam so an update will have that tightened up.