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good art is probably one of the things that takes the longest to create for a game jam. but you seem to have a lovely style sorted already. 

i thought the narrative was a bit on the nose, also why would anyone kill a dog?  

over all its pretty good though

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Hey thanks for playing! I also think the narrative was weird at points..but that high level narrative polish will come with more practice (less time constraints) and with help from responses from people like you. Thanks again!

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im no story expert but a lot of my knowledge comes from watching detailed film reviews on youtube, seeing how professionals craft a story and learning from their works. 

subtlety can be a huge asset when making a story that works. being able to get an idea to the viewer without just outright stating the idea. i believe its even easier in games cause you have dialogue, images, and action/ choices that you can play around with and point towards an idea in stead of just 1 or 2 of them. 

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It doesn't take a story expert to appreciate the story of a game. In fact, the game shouldn't require that level of expertise to be understood because then you miss out a large chunk of your audience

I completely agree with your view however, I also think that subtlety comes across significantly better in much bigger games. The idea of choices tea-spooning ideas to the player rather than giving such big chunks of the game away at a time would definitely help the game immersion and narration. I will definitely be using your ideas here in the future to a further extent.

Thanks for the feedback!

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its not that you have to be an expert to enjoy a story, its that if your looking to improve your story telling skills, might as well learn from the best. im suggesting that it might be worth looking into, the good thing about videos is that you can listen to them whilst doing other things, like the art for a game. so its not too much of a time commitment

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Will defo do that