Favorite lines in no particular order:
- "pOrToBeLLo"
- "Can i see your speaking hole?"
- "oH yUo mEaN mY gLoW uP"
- "In the end, you ate the whole plate"
Humorous, touching, and surprisingly unnerving. I enjoyed exploring the evil routes just to see what would happen. >:) Seriously though you did a good job making Portobello both pitiable and repulsive, in a way that's kind of uncomfortable to think about. Like I'd like to think I would be a little nicer than the protag to a little flesh ball that started growing in my basement...but would I? Really? Would I be able to accept his bulging eyes and weird talkhole, or even his decision to name himself something so ridiculous? The part where he creates a mouth to conform to your idea of normalcy is even more heartbreaking than I realized. :_; Bridging that gap seems difficult if I honestly think about it, but he deserves it. He deserves the world. I wish I could have let him see the sun.
For something put together in just two weeks I found unexpected depth and intimacy in it; I have mad respect for anyone who can pull that off. Phenomenal entry.