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You did a great job of working in some detail to flesh out the DAOU as a faction - in particular, I thought the bit about how they won't trust footage from an automated drone without an organic eye to verify it was a brilliant idea that fits perfectly with what we know about them. I couldn't help but feel a little let down by the ending, though; it felt like I'd just read the start of a much longer story rather than a complete shorter story.

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Yeah the word limit started working against what I wanted to tell this time, so had to rely too much on implied action, especially near the end (like the mother comment, it has a much deeper layered nuance, but ran afoul of editing), but I appreciate your notes and maybe I can work something as a sequel/prequel in the future (I originally started from the Alien Hive POV LOL)