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That’s good to hear, I think you have a lot to offer and this is just a beginning!

I see what you were going for, but had a bit of trouble with the solution from a practical point - still, it was well written and an appreciable amount of world building in such short space 

and so begun, the coffee wars have…

Very nice and entertaining, an excellent submission!

very nice flow to this one, enjoyable to read and invites the reader to want to know how things fit into a larger scene

This flowed really nicely, well done!

Fish indeed! Nice read and reeks of the need to be expanded upon in the future!

well the crossed rifles mark Brangon’s generation 😉

just looking for clarification, the adults disagreement was the creative resource? Overall it seems like the start of something that could easily be expanded upon.

Really enjoyed this “short story’, quite well done 👍 

a rat by any other name might portell Mercutio?

And now we have Chekov’s rust for the literary world

LOL yeah gotta love the classic Sunbow era, and thankful to say even my twins got the reference without being explained too 🤣

Thanks and glad you enjoyed it, it was fun to write in a way I had not expected.

Very evocative writing, concur there is some strong work here and look forward to reading more on this in the future

Really nicely done and can totally envision the P of P reference meets Moria 

Thanks a lot, I know it was a bit silly and not at all what I intended to write originally, but there were these comments on the discord channel that set a seed and so here we go

An interesting take, thanks for sharing!

Nicely  written, gripping. Even when you knew which direction things were headed which is hard to do.

it does so thank you for the added insight, and  truly from  the implication of the defenders actions it was clear it was of some import, it was just the way I read the phrasing I think that made me wonder why the character expressed it in that manner.

Many thanks to you for your time reading and commenting!, From the various comment's too much exposition for the format is  something I have to work on (which is a good thing), but the idea itself seems reasonably received which I take as not bad at all for such a quick turn around. 

not at all, the length parameters are definitely limiting (in a good way) and your comments are both appreciated and valid - I would only hope that with more time/editing and space it could be polished to be more enjoyable, so the critique is very welcome

Fun read, but this confused me a bit:

“Negative, Sigmund. If we fall back they get into the vault. Under no circumstance can that happen. I don't know why they want in there, but their folly could threaten this system! Hold your ground.”

Thanks for the feedback, I can think of now tightening it up in a few ways to lower the exposition level for sure.

I keep thinking he still got off better than the Space King boys (search You Tube if needing reference)

I've heard of League of Legends, but never played so had to look your reference up, but gotta say the title Void Reaver has a nice sound to it :)

This worked rather well, and while the story focus wasn't on the objective character, I can see where you went about prey trying to slip away and still getting caught. Nice!

Really well polished piece, had some Aliens vibe as well which might be from GW and new Alien trailer spot I just saw :)

thank you for your kind words, these are factions I hadn’t used before so wasn’t sure quite how to approach them in a fun way

Nice action and different use of personalization for the main character you don’t see often!

Always look into your food's ingredients!

This is a solid mcguffin tale gone wrong concept mixed with the Battle of Five Armies level of involvement which is super hard to pull off in the limited word count, but if you had more space I think this could be really developed further (maybe in a sequel/prequel for next jam if the themes line up?)

great start for her story, hopefully you will write more with her in the future!

Nice write-up and take on marauders that I haven't read before on these jams!

I think there are some really good elements here that would be suited for a longer format, just not enough word space to get into the details fully I think, but worth taking the time to expand for sure.

nice adherence to low/no gravity concerns, very much enjoyed this outing, well done!

Nice call back to the old ER'We Go Ork books on lifecycle (or at least it looked like it), good read!

"And let me tell you, there’s no bond stronger than a lie needs takes two lips. " this was very nicely written

nicely done, It's really impressive to try such a hard format in such a short timeframe!

Nicely written and very enjoyable, and not meaning to nitpick but if the torpedos were that close and expected to destroy the ship and the boarding team didn't teleport/transport in/out not sure they could get out and clear from the vessel anyway?