That was cool! The story was fun, and the script is pretty good. It just needs a little proofreading. The menu navigation in the 2nd chapter was a cool twist on the visual novel format.
I really like the art! It has a soft and somber appearance.
The music has a great atmosphere to it. Although, it is mixed a bit loud; when combined with the other sounds, the audio sometimes peaks above -0.0 dB.
Fantastic! Great work!