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Thanks so much Hobby Fuzion! Very kind comments and high praise <3  I hope you and your daughter had fun writing and submitting your stories. Good luck in the Jam :)

Hey small_grey_owl

Those are lovely comments. thanks so much for taking the time to give me such great feedback. It's all much appreciated and I'm so glad you enjoyed the story. 

You're probably right about the theme. I tried to make it subtle and have multiple elements,  ending with  the triumph of a 'strong intelligence' but it was probably a bit too intangible. I just wanted to get away from the standard trope of wizard vs fighter etc. 

Good luck :)

Haha, I love fantasy! I'm probably in the minority but that's one of the reasons i love playing OPRs. So open and model agnostic. Yep i think my scope was too large, I'll try and narrow it for next time. Glad you think it doesn't totally undermine the story <3

Thanks SupNerds, your comments are super kind :). I cut loads down and was still worried about it feeling a little too cramped! Normally I'd write 1000 words as a short chapter not a full story! I think next time I'll go for a smaller concept. Good luck in the Jam

Thanks so much for taking the time to comment. Glad you like the concept. I ebay sniped 120 mantic zombie/undead models and got to thinking about how to run an undead army and the concepts behind it. Yep, think I did over exposition that Wizard concept, should have been a bit more subtle and trusted the reader to pick up on it tater.