Wooooo, i loved it. They are adorable, can't wait for the next update
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To start, i'd like to make some points of my original comment clearer. On the first point, i was already aware that some songs are from the public domain but i thought that some of those songs were Echo Project's and other creators original ost, that's why i mentioned the possibility of them getting mad about but, if the music used are from public domain then my mistake. On the second point, as someone who has read many VN's over the past decade i simply was trying to help by providing my point of view and a few ideas for improvement, there is no need to be a ''professional writer'' to write a conversation between two people. Other conversations that happen in the story flow more naturally and only the hospital one is ruff around the edges. Point 3 is mostly about world building, in other words, providing what can be considered the common sense of the world, in order for the reader to situate themselves with the new world they are exploring, something like a flavour text.
In the end my comment is just that, a comment and choosing to take the criticism and advice at face value or with a grain of salt is yours to make. I love reading VNs and have already read a lot of them, including many that ultimately died without an end because the creator lost their way and/or gave up half way. My hope was to help a new creator not only improve their story but also grow as a writer, by pointing out what i considered shortcoming in the writing or plot, but like i said before, it's just a comment. For the most part i enjoyed the VN and would like to see what will happen next in your story so goodluck
Cool VN but here's a improvement you need to do:
1 - You should be careful when using the ost from other VNs. Echo project and other creators might have a problem with you for using their ost's in your VN without permission, i recommend start looking for royalty free music and use those instead.
2 - Despite the story having an interesting plot, some interactions feel weird and there are too many characters being introduced simultaneously. The info dumping doesn't help either, and at some points i got the urge to just start skipping parts but i pushed through and managed to finish. Try working on the pacing and gradually introducing the characters and concepts so it isn't overwhelming. Take for example the intro, Eric is injured but we don't get an explanation of why or how, there is no need to say exactly how it happen but give an ideia through Eric thoughts. And the hospital scene, someone is talking about something Eric doesn't know and he just rolls with it, that's not how people work, we always try to get as much information about the situation, especially when the MC has amnesia.
3 - Speaking of concepts, you should introduce the world and important concepts right in the beginning and expand on them as the story goes on, in order to keep the reader invested in the story. The first 5 minutes of a game or story are the most important because it determines how invested the reader will be in them. Setting a tone and expectations is really important and it works for you as well because it keeps you from falling off the path you want your story to take.
Those are just a few point of concern but other then that every thing looks great so keep up the good work, i'm looking forward for improvements and more updates. Don't give up
I downloaded in the itch pc app, and i don't get any crash messages, it just freezes and stops working. The first time, my pc mencioned a "plugin has stopped working" but that message stopped apearing. Now the game always freezes whenever i try to load any save, and new games always freezes on the log.
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I keep getting way to many errors, it starts in chapter 11, goes through chapter 12 (during chapter 12 it goes into the pool special chapter and that too gets errors), and stops in chapter 13. Then after i decode de argos pages, when i tell him his from crete, it gives another error and it remains as argos up to the end . I'll Upload all my saves in order to facilitate seeing the errors.
https://drive.google.com/drive/folders/11FIZYlZ1ZQRhsRIJYvt8uG6F4R434wea?usp=sha...
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This post is great , despite being long or because it is, it conveys very well your thoughts. I want to shine a little bit of light on way i liked Brendam more after day 6, i think perfect characters are annoying and it's the flaws that make them great, the fact that you get this image of a dotting father with difficulty controlling his urges as a small flaw and then you get the reveal that he struggles with alcohol made him more realistic in a way for me. It helps see that there is more to the character other then smut, and that the story can go many ways from there. Also i like to fix broken characters soo...
Anyway, to finish i just wanted to say that i'm loving the VN and the slow pace helps flashout the characters and the story, most VN's rush to fufill the expectations of the readers and end up collapsing on themselves, so please take your time, what matters is that your vision comes fourth and isn't tainted by our expectations.
i'm in macsen's route, rude personality, I've already tried loading different saves but nothing, reinstalling the VN and also nothing, replaying the hole VN isn't an option. It's always when i get to the point where macsen leaves and killigan has to get dressed that the equip bar doesn't come up, killigan says "i'm can't go out naked, i'm not in the forest anymore" but when the U.I. desappears the equip bar says "i can't mess with the equipment yet" and then when i click on the notebook it also says something similar, and when i click on killigan it repeats "i'm can't go out naked, i'm not in the forest anymore" and the process repeats.
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Awoooooooo "IT WAS INCREDIBLE", i better finish my time machine cause i can't wait for the next update! Btw not cool to tease the burry sex scene like that, tsk tsk.
Also i sense a One Piece theme in the credit's artworks, am i wrong?
With all that out of the way, i have to say that this VN is amazing. The world building, the characters and their development, the artwork and everything else i haven't mentioned is just... wow, i hope there will be other works like this and/or in the same universe because i have a lot of questions. It'll be sad when this VN finishes, so in conclusion love your VN Raus and i hope that there will be more of your work in the future.
*literally, and yeah but that doesn't change that someone who doesn't know what is patreon and/or that it is a paid subscription site, may download this game believing that this is a free game that requires a account (similar to WoW or Epic game's fortnite) in order to play. I almost downloaded the game but because i know that patreon is a paid subscription site, i got confused and left that comment.