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I love your story so much , I am currently replaying. Again. 

I missed this whole ordeal regarding the outrage some have 'cause of Rohan and the content warnings and such and am...kinda confused. Everything that happens in this story was properly warned of? Well, but I get that the way the MC is treated can be triggering for certain people -especially cause its kinda easy to forget that the MC is indeed first and foremost a dubious character -not by choice I guess, but its still there. In my second playthrough where I played a kinda kind MC I was kinda confused, too -kept forgetting the background of this person 😂 one isn't suddenly a good person just because Joia bought some specks of kindness to the surface of the MCs deformed soul 🫠

My favorite thing in this IF ist how...deep the trauma of the MC is. Well written. It's not the typical way a person with trauma is depicted and I LOVE it! It's such a treat to read ❤️ 

Im so invested, even after all this time!

In a sea of interactive fiction this one is imprinted in my mind while many others tend to disappear in the background after one playthrough. 

Congrats to that, its not easy to achieve and definately sth to be proud of. 

You are doing great, I really appreciate how you handled the harsh accusations in one of the other comments on here. Respect, its certainly not easy to handle a triggered person with trauma -and thats a compliment coming from someone that works daily with deeply traumatized people. 

I am so intrigued how your story will progress ✨ Can't wait for the update 🥰

So. I just had to say, that this IF hooked me so bad, it was in my mind for the last 15 days straight, with no competition at all, even though I tried so hard to get inspired by sth new. 

Well. Now I began this story anew - for the third time ☝🏻❤️ 

Yeah, I have that, too with the switch of pronouns. If you choose a female dog it was one time referred as a "he". Chris is referred to as "they" several times.

I really love Cam and everything feels really fluid and over all satisfyingly balanced!

I have an issue though with the ex. I decided to make them an ex-friend and I don't get their reasoning. How can a simple friend feel such deep betrayal for the MC getting together with Chris? I get why we got no direct reasoning in the demo for the suspense alone but sadly with the choice for them to be no ex whom MC had a relationship with it kinda....irks. After the confrontation I was seriously thinking "wtf is their problem with MC and why ist it automatically narrated through MCs thought process that we feel guilt??" The last bit regarding the guilt felt forced upon the reader... No friend would turn to such extremes on a friendship simply cause they hate the partner? I believe there is a good explanation for it. Still. With what limited information WE currently got with the demo that whole affair feels...i dunno how to describe it. Before I was so throughouly invested in the story and then I was kinda kicked Out of this trance, If you get what I mean. It was a tad bit confusing.

Sorry that I needed so much words to deliver what I meant, hope it conveys what I meant to say.

And don't get me wrong, I was one of the first lurkers to your Tumblr account, I anticipated this demo for a long time and I truly love everything about it to pieces. The described situation above irritated me cause Im autistic af and have a hard time not knowing why someone hates me/ has a problem with sth I did - it deeply concerns me and that results to overthinking -and it kinda always bleeds through my reading experience in interactive fictions 😅 As one can guess I tried several times to reach a sliver of understanding...to no avail.

I love how strong Cams character was portrayed, If I had to choose what I enjoyed the most in your story it would be that. He just feels so complex and...well, real. Simply amazing work! 

I loved the route of Cam even before the demo, you delivered this expectation and more. Repect. Not many interactive fictions can do that and captivate their readers like that. 

Well. It just so happens that I also read this IF a while back. At the beginning I was confused, too, yes. But. It cleared up a bit after the fight scene and such.

And even though I haven't begun to read it anew I still remember the conversations about the war and everything. 

Also, your initial assumption that you think that the author hasen't read their own story is... honestly uncalled for. Especially if one regards their very forthcoming answers to you. In my eyes it's a tad bit disrespectful to assume such a thing if not intentionally harmful.

I am writing an IF too and this part right here is about the only thing I absolutely despise of being one: we IF authors are so close to our readers and try so damn hard to please everyone...and those insults regarding the worlds and characters we've carefully built are often pretty intertwined with our mental health... I for one would feel so disheartened to get such a reply...

Dear author, please dont take such criticism to heart, especially cause it wasn't kept constructive in my opinion.

Many others, as well as I, truly enjoy the world you've built ☝🏻 

And tbh at the beginning...isn't it necessary for the plot and such to be just as confused as the MC? For me it's a sign of good writing the moment the story sweeps me up with some emotion.

The only thing I would love in IFs in general would be more chooseable genders for the ROs. It is adding so much freedom to the story overall and tends to attract a much wider spectrum of readers 🥰 

I love the world you've built! The characters are so complex, it's simply amazing❤️ I love how every RO we've Met so far has a unique personality and feels authentic. Though I might add that I'm too ivested in Galahads route to really consider any of the other's with more than Just curiosity. For me Galahads reactions to an innocent and kind Mordred are everything! I love his path of Independence he's taking, how he just melts more and more and becomes more than this imitation of his dad. 

I really, really love the update!

I, too, picked for my MC to write often in the journal and in the bathing scene it said that the water was more calming than writing in it... 

And then... I've chosen drawing as my mc's hobby (as an introverted, socially awkward little snowflake with a way too strong sense of duty). But as the mc was about to participate in the hunt it said that hunting has always been the mc's favorite? It doesn't fit, especially cause I chose for them to participate despite personally hating the mere thought of hurting an animal - they're a bookworm through and through with almost no fighting skills at all and only forced themselfes to join in, with being the consort and propriety and all that fuss :D

Well. Im always eager to ready your story and despite all the hate... i kinda like Luceris. Especially the dynamic of my rather kind and docile MC and him. Their scenes just have such an authentic feeling to it. The unwanted adoptive child that you somehow awkwardly positioned as your decoy-husband blinded by rage in a revenge plot that made so much sense back then but now brings forth a quite distressing and rather complicated mess of emotions that more often than not contradict each other... 

I deeply love this story for how Luceris is portrayed. Humans are such multifaceted beings and emotions can shift and coexist despite common sense. Its a truly authentic mess and I crave for more :)

And even though I care so deeply for that unhealthy and yet strangeky endearing family-killer/Guardian -and his victim/kinda-adoptive-child/decoy-husband-thing, I of course am all in for the ro's. 

My mc simps for Vincent without really wanting to acknowledge it though. Vincents mum alone is reason enough for my MC to becespecially cautious. Who would choose such a mother-in-law willingly? Quite the predicament indeed.

Well, that was enough blabbering. Stay safe and healthy, dear author :)

I really love your writing style so much! I appreciated every little new detail that was added and thorouhghly enjoyed coming back here in general. Siruud is such an interesting character, I just love to be able to sick my small ball of a socially awkward mc on him. It's a treat. Especially cause Siruud is not enarmoured with the mc from the start, I prefer all the little bumps on the road to understanding and appreciating one another. That's what makes a dynamic much more authentic ✨

I really like this game ❤️

Everything is well written, it makes fun to read. I was invested in the story pretty fast. 

Im really interested how the story will proceed! 

I really liked the game❤️. It  kept me occupied for quite a while and I'll eagerly wait for more.

 Currently I like the Yves RO. Let alone for the mystery of it. I'm not entirely, convinced that harbouring the MC is all that innocent and I like the ongoing questions one asks oneself regarding Yves possible involvement regarding MCs amnesia and such. Well, the same goes for Jax, though.

I also replayed to a save from which I'll try the other ROs -omce more content regarding them is Out, that is. I think the next one will be Arthur for sure. Just for the fun of it - it's always interesting to see how far a character can change their first opinion of an MC if pursued. I love a well written change of heart -sprinkled with angst and possibly some hurt along the way 🤔😅

Keep up the good work 😊

I really liked everything so far! 

I love Grayson and think he's a really lovely character. The athmosphere you've build in that little scene with him was such a nice one. Grayson is a living, breathing comfort zone for the MC.

The awkwardness at the start between them was nicely pictured too.

I'm eager to read more :)

Wow. That's just so extremely...mean. Didn't know that comments nowdays have the purpose to belittle the story... It's not constructive criticism to say that sth was boring. Seriously. 

If you don't like sth how about going somewhere else entirely? 

And if one is inclined to comment regardless at least be a decent human being while at it.

There is not a single interactive fiction out there that has been easy to write. Creating something like that is so fucking hard and time- consuming. It's a blessing that authors share their art with us at all.

I really don't think you should feel entitled to put such a disheartening comment under other peoples work...

It can really Hurt and that shouldn't be one's goal.

I wondered about that, too. The romanceable characters are only starting to get more room in the story at the current end of the demo - which isn't a bad thing, don't get me wrong :) But yeah, I had the impression of Luceris being like a secret RO, too 😅 Simply cause their interactions are many plus pretty intense and I guess thats the reason Luceris tends to leave a heavier impression at the moment 😊

I really love this story. The character development ist great. The MC is very well built, I love the fact that we're able to play them as children. Not many IF I've encountered did that, which is a real treat :)

I really like the building trust between the MC and Irus. Can't wait for chapter 5 ! :)

Oh my goodness.... I absolutely love your story! 

Character build is so captivating, I instantly felt connected to the MC. Siruud is such a mesmerizing being & I really adore your writing style! ♥️ 

Really, really hope this story will be continued sometime 😢 it stopped at such an interesting scene