doesn't it look professional?
https://leonard-somero.itch.io
artist Tessa Gomez drew the lynx banner, everything else is my design.
i am looking for feedback about how well it establishes that these games are professional quality and even worth some donation money.
It needs some work in order to look professional...
The lynx is OK, but I don't understand why it is even there. Is it supposed to be your logo? Or is it promoting a specific game/project? The dotted background doesn't make sense to me either, it is very generic and doesn't fit with the lynx itself which should be framed with some nature scene or nothing at all (i.e. transparent background). It would be fine for an artist just sharing their work, but for a logo or promotional image it is somewhat lacking. Some of the outlines are even crossing over each other.
The lynx image and introduction paragraph take up a lot of space, I would want to see at least the first row of games immediately upon loading the page. Also it is strange to have "Leonard Somero Productions" written just above the projects list. Your name should appear at the top. Since you have a banner image it would have to be included in the image.
The first paragraph could be shorter. "Is a software company" is redundant - nobody will be guessing what your page is about if they see a list of games. Your name should have already appeared at the top and thus not necessary in this paragraph either. The "provide curious games that enrich people's lives" line is filler, it doesn't really say anything about you. Every developer on the planet wants to make games that people like. Personally, I would remove that and just let the games speak for themselves, but if you really want a self-promotion here then try to think of something that actually makes you and your products unique. Something like "I make games that use physics in unexpected ways." It should be specific, not general.
So with those edits the paragraph might read like this:
Honestly saying you have 10 years of experience isn't very important either. A customer is unlikely to buy something based on that.
"please pick one i'm hungry i need money" sounds very pitiful and unprofessional. Delete!
The second paragraph is a bit strange, people who are looking for games to play do not care about your vector graphics library. Developers who are looking for resources will be searching for the specific thing they need and do not need to read this either.
The page is visually pretty basic, just a green background with a standard font. Some more variation in color, or some more graphics such as a background image, could help with this.
Finally, you have several projects listed that are not credited to you. The four games on top are from verysoftwares. If you were part of these projects then you need to ask to be listed or else people will assume you are just faking it. If you did not contribute to them, posting them as if you did is just dishonest and also kind of silly since you are directing people to someone else's game and if they choose to donate to that creator, you get nothing. If you want to link to other people's content then you should make a collection called something like "Projects I Follow", so that it is obvious which things are yours and which are not. You can also use collections to separate your projects by category (i.e. Games, Resources, Music)
> Finally, you have several projects listed that are not credited to you. The four games on top are from verysoftwares.
verysoftwares and Leonard Somero are the same person.
Hello Leonard, Magicsofa went into some of the intricate details, so perhaps I could apply a more general approach. Professional isn't the term I would use to describe your page. Each paragraph of text is incongruent to the proceeding one, there is no consistent style. I would suggest that you reconsider how it is you wish to present yourself, and rewrite your text from scratch. The first paragraph reads as a company pitching a business, cold, sterile, and plural; the second is more informal and individual; the third bizarre and completely out of place. Different businesses have different marketing approaches to suit their purpose and brand, but your eclectic mix may leave potential customers simply confused.
Magicsofa mentioned this, but just to reiterate, the banner image and the font are both too large. They are so large infact that they detract from the products you are trying to advertise. For instance, the lynx image and body font are so large that they become the main focal point; the headings and images for the games seem dwarfed and insignificant in comparison. If I may be callous, most prospective customers don't care about your name, business name, location, etc; it's often simply necessary marketing nonsense that glossed over and barely processed. People wish for a demonstration of your abilities, and to see or purchase your product. In other words, show us the games! Best of luck to you.
