Play book
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| Criteria | Rank | Score* | Raw Score |
| Adherence to Theme | #39 | 3.000 | 3.000 |
| Concepts & Originality | #41 | 3.400 | 3.400 |
| Overall | #45 | 2.883 | 2.883 |
| Flow & Clarity | #47 | 2.250 | 2.250 |
Ranked from 20 ratings. Score is adjusted from raw score by the median number of ratings per game in the jam.
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Had some formatting issues, but overall a good time.
Thanks for the feedback, I think I'm just going to write in the template itself rather than transfer everything over next time.
I’d just advise dropping the font size by a point or two.
It’ll make up the space.
enjoyed the story but having the theme read out to audience especially as the end weakens the adherence to theme
I was struggling at the end there, thank you for the feedback!
Fun story! The formatting is hurting you a little, but it's still a good use of the theme.
Thank you, trying to get everything on one page has hurt me before so it's definitely something I need to focus on for the next jam.
I like the concept and the ending - definitely a fun twist on the robot sentience trope. I think you might want to lean a little more heavily on semicolons; they'll help to separate your independent clauses & improve the flow for the reader.
I appreciate that, I always struggled with the finer points of English lol.
a dark and griping story about change struggle, and finding purpose the mix of flesh machine and mind is eerie yet fascinating the ending is both haunting and strangely hopeful a cool read
Thank you, I thought the Automa possibly becoming sentient was a great narrative hook in the vinci faction book.
love the use of the lore from the vinci faction book! I don't think I can get enough from reading all about the Vinci in whatever they may be doing, and it seems like you too would've benefited in having more space to write in to get a fuller ending.
I'm glad you enjoyed it, I've been focusing on writing longer stories recently and I think that hurt me here.