Play book
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Great story and lovely use of the theme
I really like the ideas and concepts behind this one, though I do feel like it can use some additional editing passes to get it to the final draft. I feel like some of the dialogue can be reworked, as well as some exposition changes, but overall, I enjoyed this one!
Valid, it Probably suffered form a considerable cut to get it to the word count then again into the template. I was trying to keep the main ideas alive thanks for the comment!
I don’t really go for psyker stuff, but this was interesting nonetheless. Another good “Improvise, adapt, overcome” story with an ending that doesn’t strain the mind with incredulity. Good job.