Theres a lot of potential thats for sure. The story is pretty good Gave it a five star rating would be great if you did the same :)

The text became incredibly difficult to read when full screened with the red over white. Some SFX wouldn't go a miss either.

Interesting game, I think there's lots of potential in the idea of someone being whisked away to various horror scenarios. I sorta wonder if the game could have started in media res of the mansion, like in that room with the TV. There were plenty of cul de sac's of horror themed stuff, I liked where the scene with the whispers was going, but it felt a little directionless.

The word choice and descriptions were mostly good. I enjoyed imagining some of the scenes, but some left me a little confused, while others felt kind of over stated, if that makes sense?

adding some sounds as the scene progressed would have helped build the atmosphere, especially with a text heavy game.

I feel like this demo shows lots of potential, but also that it'd take a lot of time and effort to make it into a full game.

Thanks for your efforts.