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| Criteria | Rank | Score* | Raw Score |
| Code | #7 | 3.000 | 3.000 |
| Story | #10 | 2.667 | 2.667 |
| Appeal | #11 | 2.333 | 2.333 |
| Characters/world | #11 | 2.333 | 2.333 |
| Incorperation Of Kink | #12 | 2.333 | 2.333 |
| Creativity | #13 | 2.000 | 2.000 |
| Art | #13 | 2.000 | 2.000 |
| Game | #13 | 1.333 | 1.333 |
| Theme | #13 | 2.333 | 2.333 |
| Sound | #14 | 1.333 | 1.333 |
| Mechanics | #14 | 1.333 | 1.333 |
| Artwork | #15 | 2.000 | 2.000 |
Ranked from 3 ratings. Score is adjusted from raw score by the median number of ratings per game in the jam.
Judge feedback
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- Thank you for your submission. There are a few things we have to go over. First of all the inflation section is incomplete which I suppose I understand as there was a time limit. The theme is also not very relevant in this submission except for one background in the kitchen. The writing is okay but there seems to be plenty of spelling mistakes which hinders immersion. Perhaps you'd do well with an editor. The art is decent for a start but I'd like to see you improve in the future. Thank you very much for your submission and we hope to see you next year! -Mark(Team Quimbly)
- A great attempt at a first game. I hope you'll continue to study renpy at your own pace and make something really cool one day. Olivia is very cute, I think it would be possible to make her into a great character if you spend lots of time working on her. Overall, the locations fit the theme, and you did manage to incorporate everything you needed to. Well done :)
- Great first game! The characters are cute, and I love seeing new talent improve—I’m sure you’ll go far. Aside from the English, the writing is good. I like how Olivia keeps snacking away, and the idea that M was a chef is a good one. (I wonder if he was actually a chef or an actor? Maybe neither!) I look forward to seeing where you take this project or your next one. Thank you so much for joining this year’s Belly Game Jam!
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Good point:
-Narrator: Friendly with good interaction with the player. The story told by the narrator's vision is refreshing compared to that of the main character.
-Kink's choice of direction by a plot difference. Good.
-I like the characters . The drawing needs to be reviewed, of course, but I have already seen styles that are much better worked and much less pleasant to look at. Then it remains subjective.
???= Ice cream pot and snack in 1950? Did it exist? Wat kind of Snack?
Point to review:
-The kitchen made me laugh especially since I used the same one for my drawings. I would have advised to at least dull the colors so that it corresponds more to the aesthetics of the rest of the game.
-TOO SHORT.
Summary: Your English didn't bother me. I'm as rotten as you. XD. I understood everything without a translator XD
I really like the direction you're taking with a freewheeling narrator. i can imagine what kind of character the young lady can be. I also imagine that the junction between the 2 will make two totally different paths. I'm interested. However, it's a lot more work. Les Plant used his atypical. I liked it. The kitchen, however, was out of the general atmosphere. To finish it's too short. But I admit that sometimes I just want it to be short, there I prepared myself to have a good time. I'm waiting for the rest. And I'm not making fun. I'm being a gentleman. ;)
Thank for you work and see you next time. :D
Despite the rough English and short game play, it's a solid attempt for a first try in a new engine! And you already have some ideas in what you can try next with the game. I hope to see your next installment for the game! :D