Sure, and here it can get a bit confusing, especially in regard to military ranks. Military titles, such as captain, major, colonel, and general, should be capitalized only when they are used as part of a name or in place of a name.
For example, "the lieutenant went to scout ahead" versus "I told you Lieutenant to get your butt over here!" or "Where is Commander Vandjam?"
Just saying "the army" would not be capitalized, whereas if the proper name were "The Interplanetary Offensive Coalition" it would be.
In 'Expand your next Wolf', wolf would not be capitalized, even if it is considered an army rank, but saying "Wolf Marcus" as if addressing him with a title would be.
Another line is "Then how does the Army know to use Bechamel instead of ricotta" Here, army would be lowercase, along with bechamel. Bechamel is not a specific brand of sauce with a proper name, thus would not be capitalized, similar to ricotta.
"He was a Government-distributed..." would be "government" unless it is part of the proper name of the government.
"... my Special Ability" probably should not be capitalized, though if they shout "Special Ability: Hoe Around!" it should be.
"Quarry # 63 has just extracted an Obsidian Slab with a Statisee." should be "obsidian slab with a statisee." You can sort of bend the rules a bit here if it is a computer reporting, as if it were reading the code it is programmed with.
"... a Medium-Small unexplored Catacombs will soon be revealed" would just be a medium-small unexplored catacombs, since it is not a specific set. If you were to even say "the French catacombs" catacombs would not be capitalized, as it is not the proper name, but "Catacombs of Paris" would be since that is the official name. (Though the computer reporting caveat mentioned above remains).
Again, this isn't something that bothers me at all. It was just one of the few things I still remember that drilled into me when I worked at the newspaper and had to assist in proofreading sometimes before going to press. We had to take a bit of extra care on any stories involving the military, as we would immediately be called out on it. I only filled in when the news editor was out or on vacation, so my grammar is FAR from perfect. I was only expected to catch major blunders since I wasn't one of the writers.
I have found that if you do err, it's better to do so with extra capitalization in a military story. Some military publications will break the rules themselves when writing, capitalizing a lot of things that aren't supposed to be, so you may want to take that into consideration as well. Sorry if this is overload! I'm probably not the best person to try and explain.
I hope this helps!
Okay, finally time to look at this.
This VN is heavily based off of an Japanese-RPG so that’s why a lot of things are capitalized when in normal literature they shouldn’t be.
I do agree that bechamel should be lowercase. I swore that the Mother Sauces get capitalized.
Government-distributed should be lowercase.
Medium-Small should be lowercase too.
Everything else, I feel like is just RPG This-Is-Important-So-Capitalize-It, speak.
Thank you for reporting these. I will change those that I agree with you on in July.
No worries! I'm personally not a stickler on grammer, I just know some people can be! I can certainly understand your decision.
It was just a minor observation in passing, so when you asked for clarification, I just re-read through the beginning for examples. I expounded more on that part because it's something that for me personally that was confusing, and that I was reprimanded for once at my old job. I don't think you'll have veterans calling up your boss wanting you to get fired over it! (long story)
I also didn't go through past the first screen mentioning the catacombs, since I was just wanting to give a few examples, so there may be other examples later in the game, since I wasn't trying to beat you in the head with it.
I hope it didn't come across as nitpicking or critical; I just tried to mention things in my review that other people haven't already said. ; )
