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Warm and cozy. The writing, the cute CGs, and the music choice create a nice atmosphere. I'm not a big fan of SoL but I enjoyed the read. The characters have distinct voices and dynamics, making the conversations flow smoothly.

I do have a few things in mind but I guess they are nothing too serious. Firstly, I relate so much with Paola. I'm glad the boys were excited about the video games talks but I just couldn't really catch the talk rofl. Perhaps that's only a me thing, idk.

But I do think that, with your descriptive writing style, some people are bound to lose attention easier. Maybe putting in little conflicts will help OR make use of the "VN aspects" more, like when you let readers choose questions and the ice skating scene.  The latter part is memorable, although now that I think about it, almost everything went too smoothly. The nature walk, however, while the CG was cute and looked great, I  expected the scene to last longer. Lastly, I got the faint feeling you were not sure whether you wanted it to be pure about friendship or lean toward romance a bit (?)

Despite all of these, the story felt natural, and as I mentioned in the beginning, it's warm and cozy. Evoking such an atmosphere is a job well done itself, but maintaining it throughout the story is a great feat. I think this one quality is what makes BAwY stand out from the other entries (for me personally). Not everyone can direct and execute things correctly to get a specific vibe. I'm sure given more time, you'll go way way further, so kudos to you.

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Thank you for the review! I'm pleased to know that you liked the atmosphere!

I will have to say I did get carried away with having the characters talk about the video games. I wanted the characters to have a common hobby, but I didn't give much thought into how it could potentially be alienating to some readers. I wish I had more time to write more scenes, especially scenes with conflict or some kind of adversity between the main character and the wolf. He does start off as prickly, but there's not enough time to see him that way, so his growth doesn't feel as genuine to me. It's one of my biggest gripes, if I am to be honest. I'd like to revise the script and make some scenes longer, like the nature walk, the game store, and the concert. Especially the nature walk. It seems rushed. I was writing that point and beyond with about 4 days left before the deadline.

Looking back on it, I agree that it seems confusing on whether or not it was friendship or romance, but I really wanted it to turn out as a friendship, since jumping into a relationship so quickly wouldn't fit for the characters. I'll also keep this in mind for the future.