Sure! I may take some time though, because I want to savour it!
So far, let me say that the opening with Reimu was superb, already worth the download and the wait! Very well written, dialogue, tone, theme, and character-choice wise! Sprite usage shines yet again!
In just that segment, I caught these sentences that had what felt like oddities to me: “But the hall is clean on all over aspects.” “The blood on the wall get you.” “I like what make her, her."
Played a bit more, found these: “I’d tweet that thing like no tommorow”, “I could accept this rejection pacefully”, “It’s over when the when the pee colored wallpaper run red with blood..." “…I’ve personally been using them in a very hetrosexual manner”.
I also wanted to ask, is the Kotoka/Meloco scene meant to trigger that early? I got it after the first free-roam event I saw (visiting Selen, then going backrooming with Millie.)
I can see the pattern, just got through the Maria introduction - and ran into the first inconsistency, I think. On the first free-roam, I had the chance to go hang out with Selen, then talk to Millie, then run away from Rosemi. That leads into the backrooms scene, and in the ensuing events MC makes references to Asmodeus and The Root, which I just wrote off as references fans in the know would get. But then in the Maria introduction scene, she mentions both and kinda introduces them to MC, which leads me to think that the logical order the scenes should show in is "Maria introduction that introduces the concepts" ---> "Backdoor scene that recalls them". Did you write them in that order and then shuffled them around perhaps? Or was it a bit of an oversight that the player can get one scene without having seen the other?
(Also, another typo: “I came across Petra napping on the grass by the street out by the street…”)
