Seconding the above comment about tense shifts. I've noticed this too and was just about to ask if it was something you wanted us to point out as I'm not sure how finalized the script is. There's also a few instances of perspective shift where the narration switches from "you" to "I" (and not in the way that seems intended when there are genuine shifts in the narrator), as well as typos. I'm happy to make a running list as I encounter them but since there's so much still to add with the other routes and backgrounds, I wanted to know how useful that information would really be to you at this time or if it would be better to wait until you've got the script as finalized as possible.
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Yeah accidental tense shifts (and the occasional slip up when it comes to remembering I'm writing in second person) are definitely some of my major writing flaws. The plan is to wait until the writing portion is done and then hand it over to an editor(s) to polish it up before full release. If you want to be part of them team then, I will be super happy to have you <3